Fragmentation of CSFR - change ot the neutrals? pg 39

[chapcrap]

Thanks for the credit.

[cairnswk]

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credits added. cairnswk just your batterfly is missing, so please add here somewhere
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Oneyed. I'm happy with the credit given. butterfly not needed, thanks anyways.

Please be advised that you may have my credits from CC to dispose of as you wish...but wisely!

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Please be advised that you may have my credits from CC to dispose of as you wish...but wisely!

thanks. I already have this appeal.

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[Oneyed]

xml is done. anything more is needed? or just patience now ?

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[cairnswk]

...or just patience now ?
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Yes, that, patience.
I think the mods went on holidays over Xmas...seems that way anyways.

[Dukasaur]

Prepare the champagne!

(Or slivovitz... )

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Prepare the champagne!

(Or slivovitz... )

slivovica (slivovice)/slivovitz is far, far better

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I made a small graphics change. I add story to the map. do you think it is better?

Click image to enlarge.

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[x-raider]

"During the year 1992, the Czech and Slovak Governments made the decision to divide the common state. The dissolution took effect on January 1st, 1993."

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thanks to cairnswk and x-raider for help with story text.

Click image to enlarge.

Click image to enlarge.

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[cairnswk]

Oneyed, i am seeing the same story

[Oneyed]

Oneyed, i am seeing the same story

Oneyed...the story is good, but i know you may need better English...if you like...
"In 1992, the Czech and Slovak governments made the decision to divide the common state which became valid on January 1, 1993."
Only if you think this is improvement...

this is your advice. I used it except "In 1992" I used "During"...

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[nolefan5311]

Oneyed, i am seeing the same story

Oneyed...the story is good, but i know you may need better English...if you like...
"In 1992, the Czech and Slovak governments made the decision to divide the common state which became valid on January 1, 1993."
Only if you think this is improvement...

this is your advice. I used it except "In 1992" I used "During"...

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Change it to cairnswk suggestion. Also, you used "become" instead of "became", and that needs to be fixed as well. Also, I think you need to elaborate a little more, perhaps one more sentence on why they decided to do that, or the actual result of their agreement. Something like that.

"In 1992, the Czech and Slovak governments decided to divide the common state into two independent countries, the Czech Republic and the Slovak Republic, and on January 1, 1993, the two countries were created." Using "became valid" implies that prior to Jan 1, 1993 it was invalid.

[cairnswk]

Oneyed, i am seeing the same story

Oneyed...the story is good, but i know you may need better English...if you like...
"In 1992, the Czech and Slovak governments made the decision to divide the common state which became valid on January 1, 1993."
Only if you think this is improvement...

this is your advice. I used it except "In 1992" I used "During"...

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Oneyed. I am still seeing a story which says "...become to valid..."

Also, I think you need to elaborate a little more, perhaps one more sentence on why they decided to do that, or the actual result of their agreement. Something like that.

I actually don't beleive this is necessary to elaborate...if people want to find out more there is always Google or other search engines.
The map is about fragmentation of said country...it has bonuses for both republics...therefore the result must be that the state was divided

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"In 1992, the Czech and Slovak governments made the decision to divide the common state which went into effect on January 1, 1993. As a result, two independent countries, the Czech Republic and Slovakia (or Slovak Republic) were created." Using "became valid" implies that prior to Jan 1, 1993 it was invalid.

will care more about grammar
I used during 1992 because it was long and complicated process. everything as finance, army... must be divided. and only in Jan 1, 1993 it was official and this is also date of creating new states Czech republic and Slovak republic.

so could we find any final version? thanks for help

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