thehippo8 wrote:This makes me smile every time I look at it! Nice work and congrats on the stamp.
Get their first (story at the top) ... should be get there first.
Admin legend - secretaries has a capitalised first letter but managers does not ... and hallways is also not capitalised (box upper right to the admin box).
Have a think about the legend for the key cards ... maybe simplify the wording?
Molotov cocktail ... Can bombard through doors. Key card is required. ... maybe one sentence ... Can bombard through doors with correct key card. ... ?
On the map .. . Test subjects holding cell ... Maybe either ... Test subject holding cell ... or ... Test subject's holding cell ... or ... Test subjects' holding cell ... depending on whether it is a holding cell where you hold test subjects or a holding cell that belongs to a single test subject or one that belongs to lots of them. Easiest is just drop the "s" on subjects!
Administrators office ... either Administrator's office or Administrators' Office ... depending on whether its there for one or many.
Hope that helps!
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